Scion of Fangor

I liked the story, but I think it could be made even better if you edited a few things. There are quite a few info dumps and a few places ...

You started of a Goddess Golden eyes on gilded throne Both everything I ever wanted and everything I ever had You started of a Goddess And finished of as tarnished ...

I'd love to write with someone, mainly because I had an idea. I mainly seem to write energetic fight scenes and while good, the glory fades after a while and ...

Could you explain to me what enjambment is?

This is the first poem I've posted, but you can probably guess the subject. You found the truth In the bark of a gun And the roar of a plane ...

Alex sat on his own by Paiges tree, with a serrated army knife in his hand. Now there where seventeen notches. His hand was making the eighteenth. The battle had ...

Anthony Anthony watched with interest as the Vipers assembled into groups, and started to jogging to the north west. Regan was watching them all with a mix of hostility, sadness, ...

Alex Alex jumped out of the Jeep and kissed the ground. Next time he'd walk, the suspension in the Jeep really sucked. Muttering to himself about four door saloons he ...

Heh I have an internet connection woo! But I won't have tomorrow though..... Alex was meditating in his hut. It wasn't something you'd tend to associate with a killer. But ...

Gonna be away for a couple of day, so if someone could talk control of Alex for me it would be greatly appreciated. :D "Then get you're ass in gear ...

Alex Alex limped over to the prone Victoria, dropping his rifle and kneeling next to her arm. "Hey Vic, it's gonna be fine". I couldn't believe it though. I've seen ...

Alex sprang to his feet, or attempted too but had to steady himself on the wall. He checked his rifle again. Full clip, freshly cleaned and oiled. Looking around at ...

Alex Alex looked at the prone Paige then started to limp towards Regan, turning round to put another smart remark at Paige, "Nothing worse than the usual". She groaned at ...

I hope this isn't too late, but someone mentioned having some boys in it 8) . If I can then I'd like to play as: Name: Alex Smith Age: 16 ...

Hi, it's me Scion and I'll review your work today. Haven't got time for much so I'll just do the prolouge. His is my first real book and it is ...